Mrs. Melton started by giving an explanation of some poverty struggles and stresses that occur in her student's lives, being in a Title 1 school. She recognized that while she cannot control their home environments, she is responsible for controlling their atmosphere at school, and she wants to do the best that she can for them. I thought this explanation, which allows potential donors to empathize with the students, and her use of a catchy title: "Fire Up Our Classroom!" were two very good starting points for Mrs. Melton's grant submission.
Next, Mrs. Melton told about her project, which is to provide a classroom set of 18 Kindle Fires for her 5th graders. In telling about her project, she gave three examples of apps that she can download from the Amazon App Store to be used in her class, and explained how they will benefit her lessons and her students. This was a great tactic. Kindles are typically associated with reading, and Mrs. Melton will use them to enhance her student's reading, but she also have examples of ways that her students can use the technology for math and spelling purposes, and even to make their own reading-level appropriate books. Further, as the age of technology continues, it is essential to teach younger students how to be more fluent with technology. This was one of her strong points as well.
The only thing Mrs. Melton could improve is her page's photo. The photo is an incomplete, strangely cropped image of a pin board in her room. Letters on the board read "Melton's Master..." The rest of the letters are cut off, and there are illegible pages hanging from the board. The pages look like student work, and the thought behind this photo is nice, but I think people would be more inclined to donate if they could see some or all of the children that their donations would be effecting. Just a small viewing of the front of Mrs. Melton's classroom is not doing much for her cause. Besides the photo, Mrs. Melton created a post that is relatable, empathetic and is striving for enhanced curriculum and class activity. She did a great job.
5 tips based on this review:
1. Use a relevant and informative picture. Include students with their permission.
2. Give possible donors a brief but wholesome description of students and classroom.
3. Give specific examples for how to use what you are requesting money for in your classroom and for the benefit of your students.
4. Be clear and concise.
5. Use an eye-catching title
Next, Mrs. Melton told about her project, which is to provide a classroom set of 18 Kindle Fires for her 5th graders. In telling about her project, she gave three examples of apps that she can download from the Amazon App Store to be used in her class, and explained how they will benefit her lessons and her students. This was a great tactic. Kindles are typically associated with reading, and Mrs. Melton will use them to enhance her student's reading, but she also have examples of ways that her students can use the technology for math and spelling purposes, and even to make their own reading-level appropriate books. Further, as the age of technology continues, it is essential to teach younger students how to be more fluent with technology. This was one of her strong points as well.
The only thing Mrs. Melton could improve is her page's photo. The photo is an incomplete, strangely cropped image of a pin board in her room. Letters on the board read "Melton's Master..." The rest of the letters are cut off, and there are illegible pages hanging from the board. The pages look like student work, and the thought behind this photo is nice, but I think people would be more inclined to donate if they could see some or all of the children that their donations would be effecting. Just a small viewing of the front of Mrs. Melton's classroom is not doing much for her cause. Besides the photo, Mrs. Melton created a post that is relatable, empathetic and is striving for enhanced curriculum and class activity. She did a great job.
5 tips based on this review:
1. Use a relevant and informative picture. Include students with their permission.
2. Give possible donors a brief but wholesome description of students and classroom.
3. Give specific examples for how to use what you are requesting money for in your classroom and for the benefit of your students.
4. Be clear and concise.
5. Use an eye-catching title