I thought the teachers did a great job of helping the reader get to know the students' situation and a little bit about her class. I also thought the teachers overall had a great reason for wanting her students to be able to get the funding since it is something they will enjoy doing. But I feel that the teacher should have included more about how being active is important to their learning and for their classroom. The teachers also could have added a more personal photo rather than just a pic of the corner of a classroom.
5 Tips:
1. A catchy title
2. Pictures
3. Good description of the children
4. Vision and explanation of what it would look like if they got the donation
5. Reasonable amount of money as a donation request
5 Tips:
1. A catchy title
2. Pictures
3. Good description of the children
4. Vision and explanation of what it would look like if they got the donation
5. Reasonable amount of money as a donation request