Wiggle While We Work
Overall, I think this teacher
did a great job creating her request. I can not be the only one seeing as she
has a very large dent in her goal already funded and still has over a month to
go. For one thing, her picture is very visually pleasing without showing much.
The picture of presumably her students having their hands all in a circle
creates an image of unity, something potential donors may like to see. She tells you exactly what brand of chair she
is buying so if you wanted to look it up yourself you could. She shares why
they are needed and what they will be used for. Something I though was
interesting, is that she already has a few of these chairs, so you know that
they are tested and successful in achieving the purpose she has in mind. This
is good because it tells future donors that they will for sure be used and not tried
out and then thrown into a storage closet if they don’t work out. Some improvements I would make is she shares
how students using these special chairs act, but what about those not using the
chair? Do they distract those using the chair? Why is it essential that there
is a chair like this for every student during small group instruction? Overall
I really liked the product that this teacher put out and believe she will be successful
in achieving her goal.
Watch Me Learn, Watch
Me RE-Vibe
This teacher gives you a lot of information
about her students and their needs and desires. I think this is a plus because
future donors want to know who is benefitting from the project. She shares what
kind of classroom she teaches in and they are a highest poverty need, so this
all is good points toward persuading donors to contribute to her cause.
Something that I think could be improved is that she tells us what product she
is wanting to buy and gives an overall summary of what it will accomplish,
however not how it does this. I think that she should have explained exactly
how this band monitors the student and helps them stay on task. How does it
work? The idea of the product is neat, but how does it achieve this goal? That
is something I would have liked to know if I was going to contribute to this
cause.
Wow!
Those Workers Are Just Like ME!
I really love this project! For
one this teacher works in the exact environment that I want to teach in, and is
striving to accomplish something that is one of my main teaching goals, provide
students with experiences that show them the job opportunities available. The teacher
does a great job of telling the donors where the trip will take them and why
that location was chosen. She does a
great job of explaining the benefit it will have, and why it would be important
for the students to have this experience. Something that could be improves is
explaining where the money goes. In the bottom it tries to do this sectioning
out the costs, but I want to know specifically what the almost $500 to go to
the Inn Restaurant does. Does price include transportation to the inn? Is this
the price of the food they are going to eat collectively? Does this include
staying a night in the Inn? I want to know what parts of the trip are they
paying for with this donation.
5 tips for future Donation writers
1.)
Explain your students and your classroom environment.
Donors like to picture the classroom their money is going to help.
2.)
Give the exact name and details to the
product you are wanting to buy. This gives future donors an idea of the product
and what it does without having to look it up. Some donors may choose to do
further research but the more relevant information you can give the better.
3.)
Be specific with where the money is going. If
you have a large budget for one thing, explain why it costs so much, and what
all the parts of the project are.
4.)
Be detailed but concise with your
explanations. Donors don’t need a lot of fluff, they just want to know what you
need and its benefit.
5.)
Explain how this item/experience will be used
and its purpose. No one wants to donate to a cause where the item bought is
going to be used for a short time and then thrown into storage. Explain it’s reusability.
