Haven Ellis
Critique Donors Choose Badge
02/21/17
What are five things these donors choose applicants
did well?
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For the first link I thought that the
teacher did an excellent job at explaining why she needed the funds for her classroom.
I like how descriptive she was and told the viewers the three main goals she
wants her students to be able to accomplish once completing the class ( Pillow
case, Reusable bag, Pajama Pants)
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I thought the teacher did a good job at explaining
how hard her students have worked throughout the years. The fact that they are
in the highest teacher-student ratio area is a big deal and it tells a lot
about the students drive and dedication to be successful.
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For the third link, I absolutely loved how
the teacher started off by asking the viewers questions. She starts by saying “Remember
when you were a third grader?” By starting off with this question she gets the
viewers to think back and essentially makes them think what it would have been
like for them as third graders if they would have been given the wide range of
seating options available in the classroom.
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All three of these teachers I thought made
good and arguable points as to why they needed the funds for their students.
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They were very specific on how they intended
on using their funds and I appreciated how open and honest they were about the
students and how some or a majority of their students came from lower income
families.
What are five things these donors choose applicants
did not do well?
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For the first link, overall I thought the
page was great however I think the teacher could have come up with a more
creative title. I think she would be able to get more attention from potential
donors if her title was more interesting than “Beginning Sewing”
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When looking at the second link, I felt
like the teacher was very repetitive in saying how hard her students have
worked. I think every teacher is going to say that they have hard working
students who deserve to have a little fun but I felt like she could have given
some more examples of work these sixth graders have accomplished. I was also
confused when she said that the students would be able to learn more about the
lifecycle and wildlife reservation at frontier city? Unless they have added a
new part to the park that I am unaware of, I would have liked for her to have
given examples on how these students were going to be able to work with and
learn about the life cycle, ect.
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For the third link, I loved the title but I
was disappointed in the picture that the teacher chose. She is asking for
different seating so her students will be able to wiggle around while learning
but then the picture for the application is a drawing of a flower. I would have
liked to have seen a picture of the chair so that why I know what I am donating
to.
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Going
back to the beginning sewing link, just like I said for the third one, I definitely
think she could have used a better picture. She should have showed the students
actually sewing or doing something related to the class other than just
standing and smiling.
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Overall I think each of these teachers
could have been just a tad bit more specific with their descriptions.
I would recommend that
the teachers really take into consideration what they are using for pictures
and their titles. Those are the attention grabbers and in order to be
successful and have people donate you have got to stand out amongst other
teachers who are essentially wanting the same thing (people to donate) just for
different causes.
