The reason I picked the three I did was because they struck me as important and needed attention. Each of them gave the exact reason why they were needing a donor's choose to help fund their cause. For example, my favorite of the three was the "Building Tomorrow's Leaders: Educational Field Trip to Disney World." In its description, it states that "We are raising money to help fund a middle school culmination trip to the Disney Youth Education Program during the month of May. The program consists of guided, in‐park educational field studies with courses in Applied Sciences, Environmental Studies, Liberal Arts and Leadership Development. Students will participate in 2 courses throughout the duration of this trip: an Energy and Waves Physics Lab and a class on Managing their Brand/ Leadership. This trip will help tie together many key components of the 7th and 8th-grade curriculum as well as prepare our students for high school" (Savage, Mrs. "Building Tomorrow's Leaders: Educational Field Trip to Disney World"). I didn't they needed to fix anything because I felt it was a winning donor's choose; that's because I want girls to feel like they can become leaders if given the opportunity through a little hard work and effort. The "Inspirational Mosiacs to Improve School" had a good idea and I felt it was a worthy cause, but I felt they needed to work on their description a little better; there were some spelling errors and paragraph errors that I felt were a little confusing to the description of what they teacher is intending to do. From what I understood, she's trying to help improve the self confidence in her students of different backgrounds feel good about themselves. To do this, she wants to get art supplies, specifically mosaic tiles and clay for students to get creative. In her description, Mrs. Heckenkemper writes, "By donating to our project, you will not only help to improve the art room for future but you will increase student self esteem." The last one I picked, "Making Magnetic Magic with Blocks," seemed to also do a good job at describing the need for their donor's choose with a passion, which draws me in; I love to see people write in a way that shows passion about their cause, just as "Building Tomorrow's Leaders" did too.
The 5 tips that I would suggest for a Donor's Choose that is trying to be considered a winning choose would be:
1. Be passionate about your cause
2. Put the children in the classroom first
3. Describe how your Donor's Choose will benefit your cause
4. If possible, include student input to the cause (for example, "Building Tomorrow's Leaders" did this by getting inputs from two of the girls who are earning money for their leadership trip.)
5. Always double check for spelling and grammatical errors (I know it shouldn't be too big of a deal, but when I see a donor's choose that has multiple grammatical errors, like "Inspirational Mosiacs to Improve School," it throws me off. For example, the Inspirational Mosiacs choose already has a misspell in the title; mosiacs should be mosaics.
The 5 tips that I would suggest for a Donor's Choose that is trying to be considered a winning choose would be:
1. Be passionate about your cause
2. Put the children in the classroom first
3. Describe how your Donor's Choose will benefit your cause
4. If possible, include student input to the cause (for example, "Building Tomorrow's Leaders" did this by getting inputs from two of the girls who are earning money for their leadership trip.)
5. Always double check for spelling and grammatical errors (I know it shouldn't be too big of a deal, but when I see a donor's choose that has multiple grammatical errors, like "Inspirational Mosiacs to Improve School," it throws me off. For example, the Inspirational Mosiacs choose already has a misspell in the title; mosiacs should be mosaics.